Thanks to a generous donation from my patron of fine literature GreenMongoose I have a laptop to write and edit my story on. So far everything has been written and edited on a mobile phone. Beyond just correcting obvious mistakes and editing the text for clarity and grammar I wanted to see if any readers had advice, questions, recommendations, or suggestions. Some questions you could answer in the comments include:

  What is your favorite parts of the story? Characters, world, system, plot, dialogue etc.

  This tale has been unlawfully lifted from Royal Road; report any instances of this story if found elsewhere.

  What do you dislike? Particular characters, pacing, structure, etc.

  Do you want to see the infamous Blue Box notification style added to the story?

  Is there anything about the system that doesn't make sense or you would like to see changed? Mechanics, Guide interactions, purpose, etc.

  What can I improve and what do you want to see more of?

  Please feel free to add any comments positive or negative. This is Your chance to contribute to a story and help it become the best story it can be!